6 thoughts on “Love Slave Part 9 (18+ only)

  1. lurvspanking says:

    Now, if I was in Mike’s position I wouldn’t have been so hasty to retreat. I think a little overdue attitude adjustment to the Chessmaster’s ego and maybe his face might have been a better option. Poor Charlotte, I just want to hug her and tell her it’s not her fault and that someone who would so cavalierly run out on her wasn’t worth the effort. Look how many people Rasputin fooled with his slick talk and big dick. Hang in there Charlotte, one of these days someone better will come along.

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    • Ina Morata says:

      Thank you so much for your lovely comment! Poor Charlotte, I’m starting to worry about her. She was meant to be enjoying herself – at least, that was the original plan – and somehow the erotica of this novella has gone rather dark.

      I think I have two choices: one is to let this situation run its course to the end of the novella, and leave it there, and another is to follow her path in another story, to see how she develops. Maybe a three-part series is in order, or a novel in three parts.

      I wonder how many readers would want to know what happens to her beyond the storyline of this novella? Should her dark experiences be turned on their head, so that they validate themselves as something she can celebrate? Is that even possible for her? How many want her to have a Happy Ever After? It’s erotica, not romance, but does it need to be? Would it make a more satisfying story if it was obviously erotic romance? Have I just talked myself into a cupboard with a large coiled rope, and let myself be completely in the dark and tied myself up in knots?!

      How would you like to see this develop? All comments welcome.

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      • lurvspanking says:

        I would like to see him cut out of the story line since it is doubtful the character can be redeemed. A bad boy is one thing, but flat out evil should always be destroyed. Charlotte though needs to grow a little backbone herself, maybe though another man, maybe Mike, or maybe another woman who turns Charlotte into her lesbian lover and teaches her how to submit to her desires without self-destruction. Or, a couple who brings Charlotte in as a submissive to both. A DP scene with a strap-on in her bottom while the man fucks her pussy as Charlotte is restrained over a bondage saddle. So many neat ideas if she could only break away. As it reads now there will be no Happy Ever After but it is never too late to change the story arc.

        Hope that helps.

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      • Ina Morata says:

        Hmmmmm, so much food for thought there that it makes me hungry… 😉

        Thank you. It’s so rare for me to write off a character that this would be an interesting challenge, especially when the character has been the be-all-and-end-all of everything. But, hey, I’m the author – I can write the story any way I think it would benefit the development of Charlotte!

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