The tension in this piece is incredible. You can feel the inevitable explosion building from the very first sentence, but when it goes ‘kablooey’ [18 points], it’s a complete surprise as to the outcome. The story does raise an interesting question about mating rituals and whether or not we choose partners based more on keeping them away from others, than actual long-term stability. Win at all costs is not always a winning strategy.
Thank you. The tension was the part of this story that I had the most fun with. I thought it was working when I began to feel it myself as I was writing, somewhere around the cheese! At that point, the story just wrote itself.
Yes, I agree, it does raise all sorts of questions, and I think maybe different ones, depending on the reader. As a writer, I see my role as one of offering up options and choices for the reader. I dislike spoonfeeding, and didacticism in fiction leaves me cold. I hope that I have avoided that.
Ina Morata 
The tension in this piece is incredible. You can feel the inevitable explosion building from the very first sentence, but when it goes ‘kablooey’ [18 points], it’s a complete surprise as to the outcome. The story does raise an interesting question about mating rituals and whether or not we choose partners based more on keeping them away from others, than actual long-term stability. Win at all costs is not always a winning strategy.
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Thank you. The tension was the part of this story that I had the most fun with. I thought it was working when I began to feel it myself as I was writing, somewhere around the cheese! At that point, the story just wrote itself.
Yes, I agree, it does raise all sorts of questions, and I think maybe different ones, depending on the reader. As a writer, I see my role as one of offering up options and choices for the reader. I dislike spoonfeeding, and didacticism in fiction leaves me cold. I hope that I have avoided that.
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